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2006-02-12, 23:03
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Slayer of dumb cunts
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Location: Virginia Tech, Blacksburg, va
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My Rage
My Rage
Verse
Only a few more moments left
Pressures up and its out of control
Sanity has already been thrown out of the window
This is the part where he'll explode
Prechorus
Grind it today, (Grinded away)
Sheltered today, (Dealt it away)
Pressured today, (Pressured away)
Give it a day, (Gave it away)
Chorus
So, it's been scribed into the stone
You will not atone
Your failure's never known
This is my rage
Verse
Can't hold back these feelings of hate
The crimson fires they burn you alive
Your hatred can't be held inside
You are blind
Prechorus
Grind it today, (Grinded away)
Sheltered today, (Dealt it away)
Pressured today, (Pressured away)
Give it a day, (Gave it away)
Verse
Caress the soft skin of the neck
Sharp edged weapons do mix and match
Frenzied rages breathe only one way
And a pierced airway I do ordain
Chorus
So, it's been scribed into the stone
You will not atone
Your failure's never known
This is my rage
I know in the verses they don't keep a consistent rhyme scheme. Its ok. I didnt' really plan it that way, but i like the way it flows with the music.
This is fresh off the cooking pot. Gonna record the vocals to the new song tonight.
Thanks for reading.
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Last edited by tmfreak : 2006-02-12 at 23:11.
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2006-02-12, 23:26
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dsnt trust ne1 < 30
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Location: Home is where the <3 is
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Not too bad and I kinda liked the breaks in rhythms. You seemed to organize them into the stanzas so they worked well.
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My eldest son's bipolar website: www.bipolarmanifesto.com
-wally: Mom, you shouldn't play after me because it makes you sound even worse than you already do. -wally:*grumbles and whispers quietly* I guess it's cuz I love you or something, but you're still a TURD
Grimm:I could read your mind but its in font size .5
Amadeus:Oh, and was there a cesserole (never mind spelling) involved?
Paddy:the fact that you didn't end up on a kids show makes me question my atheism
Dyldo: You evil strumpet!
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2006-02-21, 02:37
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Slayer of dumb cunts
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Join Date: Sep 2005
Location: Virginia Tech, Blacksburg, va
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An update to this. I have put kind of a... finished Song on my myspace "band" profile, so if you wish to you hear how it goes with the music i've put.
Http://www.myspace.com/amiserymemoir
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...Its very annoying to keep having to hear some socially-disabled teen come on these boards talking about all the drugs he's started doing so that he can maybe grasp onto some kind of positive response so he feels better about himself and what he's doing.
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